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Now it is details that I am looking for - the odd line, angle or intersection; small shapes and elements shapes that don't quite feel right; little nitpicky things that may seem inoccuous but actually slightly detratct from the subject.
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right. okay then, let's see...
*excellent overall palette
*painting descriptive of a good story, although i'd like to see one or two of the guys sticking their fingers in their ears as that rotary engine must've been very loud!
love the strong value contrasts - you are really good at that! and love the lighting!
* the teepees bother me. too evenly spaced and too well lit and too duplicated of each other.
* little man in back by the port wheel looks like his legs are running, but his torso is walking.
* i question as to whether
all would have been wearing olive drab clothing. oh, i see one in the background has a blue uniform on, but a little more variety of clothing on some of the others i think could improve it.
* the curved arm needs to be more angular at his elbow. as it is now, it reminds me of a Margaret Rey drawing. also, his fingers touching the background roofline bothers me spacially as it creates a tension point.
* roofline sticking up behind the tail is unnecessary and adds confusing element.
*the two figures standing behind at right side should be a bit shorter and tops of heads not compete with roofline - again tension point.
*foreground man holding strut should be leaning back a bit more (head further back, arm longer). as he is now, it is confusing as to whether he is pulling or pushing on the strut.
*starboard wheel should be planted a bit deeper into the grass.
of course as mike said, these are all just opinions and i had to really look a second time to see where i thought it could be improved. it is already a great painting ! excuse me - color study.